the batteries




THE BATTERIES


I was about to eat a baloney sandwich when I heard a shriek. I hurried outside but know one was in sight. Going to everyone houses I energetically asked them if anyone screamed in there house.
There was one house left and I knocked on the door. 
Waiting inpatient the door finally opened the women cried as she told me the story.
She said her radio ran out of batteries. 

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  1. Unknown1 December 2017 at 21:10

    Good try using some stronger words such as waiting impatiently. Make sure all parts of your story make sense. For example how would you hear a shriek from inside someone else's house when inside your own house.

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